I thought it might be Scorpius but I wasn't sure whether we were supposed to definitely conclude that or if the identity of the energy is yet to be revealed Oh come now, why would Shaw sacrifice a pureblood when a Muggle-born would work just as well?
finding out that Shaw killed his parents (I don't know if he really did here, but it's the sort of thing he'd do). [sideways glance] ...They're onto me. (But shhh! It's supposed to be a surprise!)
First off, I've got to say that you do a marvelous job of balancing dialogue and description. It's all melded together so smoothly and the pacing is spot-on. Thank you EVER so much, it's wonderful to get feedback on what's going on in the story but I love to get writing-based critique as well. This kind of praise is important to have when bad days roll around, lol.
Re: FILL: The Better Men (21d/30ish)
Oh come now, why would Shaw sacrifice a pureblood when a Muggle-born would work just as well?
finding out that Shaw killed his parents (I don't know if he really did here, but it's the sort of thing he'd do).
[sideways glance] ...They're onto me. (But shhh! It's supposed to be a surprise!)
First off, I've got to say that you do a marvelous job of balancing dialogue and description. It's all melded together so smoothly and the pacing is spot-on.
Thank you EVER so much, it's wonderful to get feedback on what's going on in the story but I love to get writing-based critique as well. This kind of praise is important to have when bad days roll around, lol.