Somehow... somehow that happiness had to pay off, SOMEHOW. A life for a life, then. Poor Kurt. Poor Charles. His existence is down to one again. Suddenly funneling time through so quickly after the incident was brilliant IMO, you made the way hours fade into weeks fade into grey years for the grieving REAL to your readers. Lovely use of the bullet deflection accident, because this figuratively paralyzes/ kills/ incapacitates Charles even as it did it to him physically in the film. Lovely foreshadowing of Raven's death with Charles taking up the position he took up in the beach (in the film), head on Erik's lap. I love how your grief is described briefly and swiftly. If this were art, this in my mind is like something simple in heavy strokes with lots of white space, which put weight and focus on the lines.
The line: “I am a mutant. The Nazis took my nationality from me long ago.”
My goodness. Good lord. Let me... let me... let me get my bearings. You deserve something wonderful for this, Tarahiel, you really do.
Re: FILL: Everyday Love in Stockholm 170/? TW: CHARACTER DEATH
Somehow... somehow that happiness had to pay off, SOMEHOW. A life for a life, then. Poor Kurt. Poor Charles. His existence is down to one again. Suddenly funneling time through so quickly after the incident was brilliant IMO, you made the way hours fade into weeks fade into grey years for the grieving REAL to your readers. Lovely use of the bullet deflection accident, because this figuratively paralyzes/ kills/ incapacitates Charles even as it did it to him physically in the film. Lovely foreshadowing of Raven's death with Charles taking up the position he took up in the beach (in the film), head on Erik's lap. I love how your grief is described briefly and swiftly. If this were art, this in my mind is like something simple in heavy strokes with lots of white space, which put weight and focus on the lines.
The line: “I am a mutant. The Nazis took my nationality from me long ago.”
My goodness. Good lord. Let me... let me... let me get my bearings. You deserve something wonderful for this, Tarahiel, you really do.