round 3 overflow post

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Round 3 Overflow Post

This post is for Round 3 fills only. We ask that when a round hits 8500 comments, fillers begin moving their fills to this post.

Format:
SUBJECT LINE -- Round #, short description of fic (ex: "Alex/Hank, lab partners")
--- Link to the prompt
--- Text of the prompt

--- Link to the fill
OR
--- Entire text of the fill

EXAMPLE:
Prompt: http://xmen-firstkink.livejournal.com/6437.html?thread=1038472#t2038174

Charles/Erik -- Charles is a bakery owner whose most frequent customer is Erik.

Fill: http://xmen-firstkink.livejournal.com/6437.html?thread=0139482#t4502942

Charles started off the morning the same way he always did...

Comments

Re: FILL: The Better Men (21d/30ish)

[sorcerygenius.livejournal.com]

Okay, here are more words (maybe not eloquent comments, but I try): First off, I've got to say that you do a marvelous job of balancing dialogue and description. It's all melded together so smoothly and the pacing is spot-on.

I have to admit that I'm not 100 percent sure who Shaw is going to be using to power the spell. I thought it might be Scorpius but I wasn't sure whether we were supposed to definitely conclude that or if the identity of the energy is yet to be revealed. Sorry if I'm being a bit dense.

I am so very excited for the upcoming confrontation. Erik and Charles had better kick Shaw's evil, creepy, biased butt! And Erik needs to get his wand back. And Shaw should possibly die somehow. Or it'd be okay if he were just imprisoned somewhere unpleasant for the rest of his life, too. And then Erik and Charles need to tumble into bed together without any interruptions. And Erik needs to keep working hard to ditch his prejudice towards muggles and muggleborns. Perhaps in part from finding out that Shaw killed his parents (I don't know if he really did here, but it's the sort of thing he'd do). And then make out more with Charles!

Re: FILL: The Better Men (21d/30ish)

[(Anonymous)]

I thought it might be Scorpius but I wasn't sure whether we were supposed to definitely conclude that or if the identity of the energy is yet to be revealed
Oh come now, why would Shaw sacrifice a pureblood when a Muggle-born would work just as well?

finding out that Shaw killed his parents (I don't know if he really did here, but it's the sort of thing he'd do).
[sideways glance] ...They're onto me. (But shhh! It's supposed to be a surprise!)

First off, I've got to say that you do a marvelous job of balancing dialogue and description. It's all melded together so smoothly and the pacing is spot-on.
Thank you EVER so much, it's wonderful to get feedback on what's going on in the story but I love to get writing-based critique as well. This kind of praise is important to have when bad days roll around, lol.

Re: FILL: The Better Men (21d/30ish)

[sorcerygenius.livejournal.com]

why would Shaw sacrifice a pureblood when a Muggle-born would work just as well?

Yeah, that was what I kept coming back to. Really, the only basis I had for that conclusion was that Shaw did put the black lotus mark on Scorpius, but it did seem like a pretty straightforward case of "will this spell not kill the people I don't want it to kill?" testing. So it wouldn't have made much sense for Shaw to then turn around and kill him once he's established that Scorpius is part of his "gets to live" group.