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Round 3 Overflow Post

This post is for Round 3 fills only. We ask that when a round hits 8500 comments, fillers begin moving their fills to this post.

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SUBJECT LINE -- Round #, short description of fic (ex: "Alex/Hank, lab partners")
--- Link to the prompt
--- Text of the prompt

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Prompt: http://xmen-firstkink.livejournal.com/6437.html?thread=1038472#t2038174

Charles/Erik -- Charles is a bakery owner whose most frequent customer is Erik.

Fill: http://xmen-firstkink.livejournal.com/6437.html?thread=0139482#t4502942

Charles started off the morning the same way he always did...

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From: (Anonymous)

Charles picked up the diagram he'd made. "What do you make of this? It's not Avada Kedavra after all, is it?"

"No. Too complex, and much too big." Erik ran his eyes along the swirling lines and notations. "This was never designed to kill just one person. It takes too much juice to even get off the ground to be practical as a dueling spell. And do you see this whole set of matrices here? Those are conditionals, setting rules for who it will affect and who it will pass by. I don't recognize all the script, but these symbols are 'strength' and 'blood.'" He looked through it some more. "The other diagrams... Body-Bind, basilisk gaze... they're for paralysis. That's what he spliced into this. That's how it kills. Your heart, your brain, they just... stop."

"Is there a counter-curse?"

"I can't imagine trying to counter something this powerful and intricate. It would take months of study."

"How powerful? You said it took a lot of juice. Is it a group-cast?"

"No. There's not many Dark spells that can stand that kind of cooperative energy, and this is as Dark as it gets. But for one wizard to power this... It would burn him to a crisp, even with a Lehnsherr wand, I don't think the caster could possibly survive." Self-sacrifice, even for a bright new Muggle-free world, surely wasn't Shaw's style... Erik's eye was drawn to a sort of cul-de-sac off to the side of the spell's origin point. "This is a redirect," he said through suddenly numb lips. "Separating the spell's caster from its energy source."

Charles went white. They both knew what that meant.

Shaw wasn't sacrificing himself to power the spell.

"Well, we know when and where, then," Charles said hoarsely. "Midnight, and Cerebro."

***

From:

sorcerygenius.livejournal.com

OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!! MORE ELOQUENT COMMENTS WILL FOLLOW ONCE I'VE FIGURED OUT HOW TO SAY SOMETHING OTHER THAN "OH MY GOD" IN RESPONSE TO THIS

From:

sorcerygenius.livejournal.com

Okay, here are more words (maybe not eloquent comments, but I try): First off, I've got to say that you do a marvelous job of balancing dialogue and description. It's all melded together so smoothly and the pacing is spot-on.

I have to admit that I'm not 100 percent sure who Shaw is going to be using to power the spell. I thought it might be Scorpius but I wasn't sure whether we were supposed to definitely conclude that or if the identity of the energy is yet to be revealed. Sorry if I'm being a bit dense.

I am so very excited for the upcoming confrontation. Erik and Charles had better kick Shaw's evil, creepy, biased butt! And Erik needs to get his wand back. And Shaw should possibly die somehow. Or it'd be okay if he were just imprisoned somewhere unpleasant for the rest of his life, too. And then Erik and Charles need to tumble into bed together without any interruptions. And Erik needs to keep working hard to ditch his prejudice towards muggles and muggleborns. Perhaps in part from finding out that Shaw killed his parents (I don't know if he really did here, but it's the sort of thing he'd do). And then make out more with Charles!

From: (Anonymous)

I thought it might be Scorpius but I wasn't sure whether we were supposed to definitely conclude that or if the identity of the energy is yet to be revealed
Oh come now, why would Shaw sacrifice a pureblood when a Muggle-born would work just as well?

finding out that Shaw killed his parents (I don't know if he really did here, but it's the sort of thing he'd do).
[sideways glance] ...They're onto me. (But shhh! It's supposed to be a surprise!)

First off, I've got to say that you do a marvelous job of balancing dialogue and description. It's all melded together so smoothly and the pacing is spot-on.
Thank you EVER so much, it's wonderful to get feedback on what's going on in the story but I love to get writing-based critique as well. This kind of praise is important to have when bad days roll around, lol.

From:

sorcerygenius.livejournal.com

why would Shaw sacrifice a pureblood when a Muggle-born would work just as well?

Yeah, that was what I kept coming back to. Really, the only basis I had for that conclusion was that Shaw did put the black lotus mark on Scorpius, but it did seem like a pretty straightforward case of "will this spell not kill the people I don't want it to kill?" testing. So it wouldn't have made much sense for Shaw to then turn around and kill him once he's established that Scorpius is part of his "gets to live" group.

From:

sparkysparky.livejournal.com

ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh myyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood

From: (Anonymous)

LOL I will take that as a compliment. Thank you.

From:

tahariel.livejournal.com

Oh, this is fabulous. So, so cleverly plotted and just generally clever. I'm super excited about how this is going to go down, because it's obvious how much work you've put into the idea and the execution and the writing - gorgeous as always!

From: (Anonymous)

Thank you so much! I was just telling another commenter how exciting it is to hear good things about one's writing (especially when, yes, TONS of work going in), so thank you extra-much for saying that.